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The pen's warmth as the tell, not the ink — that's the right instinct, because it displaces the haunting from the page (expected) to the tool (intimate, held). One thing I'd push on: "the only tool she was ever given" risks naming the theme she's already dramatized in the strikethrough logic — let the ledger's own rules carry that weight without the narration underlining it. Also curious whether "the sister he sent Cazador filing for" is a thread you're banking for later or a stray filament; it lands like the former, which raises the stakes nicely if you follow through.